Gregory Brunswick-Wolfenbüttel - Revision history

PBN-002: corrigindo clã

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corrigindo clã

SPN-016: /* Overview */

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‎Overview

SPN-016: /* Overview */

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‎Overview

SPN-016 at 20:36, 22 February 2022

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SPN-016 at 17:24, 22 February 2022

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SPN-016 at 17:18, 22 February 2022

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SPN-016 at 17:17, 22 February 2022

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FBN-039: /* Overview */

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‎Overview

FBN-039: /* Sire */

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‎Sire

FBN-039 at 20:22, 14 May 2021

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 {{PCSummary
-|Clan=Malkkavian
+|Clan=Malkavian
 |Position=Seneschal
 |Status= 3

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 ''His appearance, at first glance, can be quite dubious.
-''You'll notice a face of someone who cannot really determine their age.
+''You'll notice a face of someone who you cannot really determine the age.
 ''His face is lined with wrinkles, expression lines, but you can only see it with good eyesight, as his skin is very pale.
 ''The Doctor's beard and hair have streaks of gray which, in conjunction with the frown lines, make him look older. His face is like someone who hasn't eaten or sleeped well before the embrace. His pale skin enhances the dark circles.
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 ''Not that bite to drink blood, I mean something that could rip off a piece of meat.
 ''And the eyes. Eyes of a shrewd intelligence and someone watching you from the inside.
-''In the end, there's fame, it weighs, and you come to him with knowledge.
+''In the end, there's the fame, it weighs, and you come to him with this knowledge.
-''All this weighs on the very aura of his presence. Something that could be described as someone walking under your grave.
+''All of this weighs on the very aura of his presence. Something that could be described as someone walking over your grave.
 ''Even the branded and impeccably cut khaki suit or his Fedora hat doesn't help.
 ''Then comes the last surprise. His conversation can be pleasant. Or very threatening.
-''In the very end, despite the curiosity about what happened for a person to become like this, and the displeasure with his presence, the conversation was, pleasant, a man who knows how to be kind and considerate to you. His dedication to the Camarilla is almost religious.
+''In the end, despite the curiosity about what happened for a person to become like this, and the displeasure with his presence, the conversation was, pleasant, a man who knows how to be kind and considerate to you. His dedication to the Camarilla is almost religious.
-''In the end, it's up to everyone - Anonymous Description
+''In the very end, it's up to everyone to decide'' - Anonymous Description

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 '''Physical description:'''
 EN:
-A man of indefinite age, somewhere between forty and fifty years old. He looks like someone with big dark circles, white hair showing, white beard, very pale face. Perhaps he was once a handsome man, but whatever happened to him, he left his appearance very finished.
+''His appearance, at first glance, can be quite dubious.
-He wears good clothes, but does not seek to be fashionable. He is usually seen wearing his fedora hat, a light suit and a strange smile on his face. His eyes are very clear and his hair appears to have been light brown.
+''You'll notice a face of someone who cannot really determine their age.
-According to him, during his embrace, something happened, and he emanates a "Sinister Presence" in his proximity.
+''His face is lined with wrinkles, expression lines, but you can only see it with good eyesight, as his skin is very pale.

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 * Acknowledged by Alessio Rinaldi, Prince of Ravenna, Italy
 * Efficient by Alessio Rinaldi, Prince of Ravenna, Italy
-* Cherished - by the Imperial Prince Will Sommers, of the Imperial City of São Paulo.
+* Cherished - by the Imperial Prince Will Sommers, as Seneschal of the Imperial City of São Paulo.
-* Esteemed - by the Imperial Prince Will Sommers, of the Imperial City of São Paulo.
+* Esteemed - by the Imperial Prince Will Sommers, as Seneschal of the Imperial City of São Paulo.

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-'''Alias:''' Doctor
+'''Alias:''' The Doctor
 '''Real Name:''' ?
-'''Apparent Age: ''' entre 40 e 50
+'''Apparent Age: ''' entre 35 e 50
-'''Concept:''' The Doctor
+'''Concept:''' Doctor

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 * Acknowledged by Alessio Rinaldi, Prince of Ravenna, Italy
 * Efficient by Alessio Rinaldi, Prince of Ravenna, Italy
-* Respected - by position as Primogen in São Paulo
+* Cherished - by the Imperial Prince Will Sommers, of the Imperial City of São Paulo.
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 He assumed as a Primogen in the city, where he is still helping the city to the best of his ability. But it is no secret that he may still be called on to work elsewhere temporarily.
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 Assumiu a prosição de Primogênito, onde se encontra até hoje auxiliando a cidade dentro de suas habilidades.
-Mas não é segredo que ele ainda pode ser chamado para trabalhos em outros locais temporariamente.
+Em 2021, foi convidado e aceitou a honra de ser o Senescal da Cidade Imperial de São Paulo, sob o comando do Príncipe Imperial Will Sommers.
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 ==Rumors==
 * Dizem que ele é um bicho-papão dentro do próprio clã

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 ==Sire==
-Alessio Rinaldi
+Peacock Prince
 ==Gran-Sire==